LOL-- You managed to work "shank" in there! Nice work.
Ooooh, I noticed the "shank" part, too! Yeey! :DAside from that, I love the dialogue. So snarky and great.
LOL at shank.Dialogue is fantastic. I was so hooked :)
Haha! I like Sydney :) Great dialogue and voice here, it's really fun!
OMG, I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE it!!! The chemistry between the characters is AWESOME! And I was already snorting when I read your opening about her lusting after Hayden. I can't wait to see where this is going. Where ya beeen hiding this? HUGGLES MY SPARKLY GAL!!
Great dialogue! The dynamic between the characters is fantastic.
hahaha...shank! lol i love your characters...esp Leo
Your characters ring true; even though this is the first time I've met them, I get a sense of their personalities from the dialogue. Well done!
I have decided that I like Sydney. It's official. :D
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